How To Write A Detective Story
(plan your story using post-it notes first)
To begin with, you should introduce your characters. How many people are going to be in your story? Give their names and ages and some information about them.
Then, you should write about the setting. Where does your story take place? In the morning? At night? At a school or at the beach? Somewhere scary or somewhere fun?
Next, talk about the mystery or problem. Is there a strange sound, a missing object, a broken window or a lost possession? Introduce a red herring. Use all of this information to give your story an interesting title.
Finally, add in the clues that will help your characters and the person reading your story figure out what is going on. The problem needs to get solved at the end of the story.
Year 6 Blog 
WHO KILLED HARAMBE 😦
Everything was looking okay at fireman’s lane the sun was just peaking over the horizon until a loud gorilla scream echoed
through the city of London jack Wilson rushed over and soon found a dead gorilla lying in a flaming red, pool of blood but just then something pinched jacks eye it was a piece of an orange jumper “this might be a clue” jack thought just then a man came running into the zoo shouting “Toby did it, Toby did it” just in the nick of time a boy replied “it cant have been him because he was at our house playing with me until ten o’clock and the crime happened at nine o clock”
Jack rushed home to get his DNA scanner to scan the orange piece of fibre. “it matches an old friend Howard but the one thing I don’t know is where he is right now so we have to wait for him to show up” jack said so Jack went to CCTV to find out who did it he was there and it was just going to show him who killed Harambe but the zookeeper (the boys dad ) spilt coffee on the system so he couldn’t see who killed the gorilla Jack was devastated that he couldn’t find out what happened but it means more adventure for Jack. Jack was always resilient no matter what he would do he would never give up his mission
JACKS BACKSTORY
Jack was devastated that the male gorilla was dead especially since a kid he loved gorillas because when his mother died she gave him a toy gorilla and that is also how he became a detective because he looked for clues to who killed his mother and still to this very day he carry’s on looking who killed his mother.
Jack started trying really hard because it was the longest case he has ever seen suddenly Jack spotted a piece of green fibre
and a fishing rod string “the only person who likes fishing is that boys dad i think i am onto something but i cant confront him yet i need more evidence
jack. went back to his house to get his magnifying glass and looked for more clues he looked at the gorilla and noticed that he had finger prints on his back they were clean as they have just been washed it was the zookeeper because he has to wash his hands after touching an animal
“i need to get Howard and the zookeeper ( the boys dad ) in the same room in my house ” so Jack got them two in the same room and tried to find out who killed the gorilla jack asked the boys dad and he said “no” and he ran Jack started following but it ended in an arrest Jack went back to Howard in the orange jumper and said “why where you at the zoo Howard ”
Howard replied “the gorilla tried ripping my jumper i could have got him of me but the boys dad shot him that’s why he shot the gorilla” Jack solved another mystery once again but just then his radio got alerted and dashed back in action…
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*Good attempt at adventurous vocabulary Malaki eg: resilient. Edit and revise Malaki for punctuation.
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585 words 🙂 🙂 🙂
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The mystery of the missing Mona Lisa
The city of Paris was as quiet as usual. The streets were empty and no one was outside. The beautiful shops and stores were all closed, It was a dismal day. There was no life in anything; it made detective Antone wonder. His mind was filled with questions and curiousity
about this strange, awkward sight. The window from his office overlooked the city centre and the many small lanes that surrounded the centre from the royal palace. His mind was deep in thought until the phone halterd his time. He answered it and with one blink of an eye, his face splutterd out with shock, the famous Mona Lisa was gone!
The panic of the news broke out to the royal family and the people of France. Dectective Antone was called immediately to the French museum La Louvre to investigate the crime that had created panic amongst French citizens.
“Antone…it…it’s… gone!” the museum owner reported hesitantly.
“Yes I know, it has spread panic over France – especially Paris” Antone replied.
It was then that Antone noticed there was the faintest print on the door handle leading to the room were the Mona Lisa was displayed. He looked at it very closesly and could tell it was a finger print.
“Someone has opened this door overnight, I can tell as a finger print mark is on the handle.”
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A great start Luke. Excellent use of everyday language and contraction to show informal writing. Excellent choice of vocabulary. I am looking forward to the next part. Mrs B🙂
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“I will send it away to the authorities, but for now we must continue searching for any clues,”
Hours passed and still no signs of any evidence or clues. Antone decided that it would be best to halt the investigation and continue in the morning.
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The next day, the fingerprint that Antone found in the museum belonged to a man called Samuel La Greeney. Anyone rushed to the museum owner and told him the name,
“Samuel La Greeney… I know, he works at the museum as a caretaker”
“ Now we know his name and where he lives, let’s return the Mona Lisa” Antone replied,
The police had completely surrounded the house. They had there guns pointed at the door and shields if needed. Samuel walked out the door…
“Put your hands in the air and don’t move an inch” the police shouted,
“Wait… what have I done?” Samuel stated,
“You stole the Mona Lisa, we have proof that you have,” Antone replied
“No I haven’t, I was closing up for the night at the museum La Louvre, even search my house!”
Antone came to the conclusion that Samuel La Greeney did not steel the Mona Lisa and so went back to the museum to search.
Antone was walking down the lane to the museum when suddenly something caught his attention. Wait, Wait, was that the Mona Lisa in that van?
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He walked up slowly towards the vehicle and looked inside the window, it was the museum owner! As Antone started to talk to the owner, suddenly he reversed at a quick pace and then rushed of in the van. The chase was on.
A few miles ahead and the police and Antone were on his tail. They drove over bridges and past houses.
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They followed him inside and out of the city until the museum owner came to a dead end. Antone rushed out of the car and said:
“How did you steal the Mona Lisa?
“None of your business Detective Antone” The owner replied,
Police guns were pointed right at the museum owner
“Put your hands in the air and don’t move!” The police barked
“Arrest this criminal at ones” shouted Antone,
Just as the police were arresting the museum owner, and the Mona Lisa was being retrieved, Antone and the police were surrounded by Italian soldiers,
“This is our picture, and we will get it back no matter what,”
“This is our picture”
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The case of the broken Lego model!
A crime has been committed!!
A huge model of Egeskov castle, near Odense, Denmark-that has taken years to build- has been wrecked and lying in thousands of pieces all over the floor. WHO DID IT?!?
Samson Christofson, the world famous Danish detective, examined the destruction, searching for clues. On the floor, Lego was scattered everywhere amongst small fragments of shattered glass, and there was a trail of Lego leading out of the room. In the corner of the room, a toolbox sat surrounded by tools. A tube of black poster paint lay spurting paint all over the white, shiny desk. On the carpet, there was a washing basket full to the brim with freshly ironed clothes and the wardrobe and drawers were open.
Sitting at the dinner table, Samson peered cautiously at the suspects in the room. “Hmmmm…” he thought “who could be the criminal?” then, his sharp eyes noticed something. Harry-Jens’s hands were covered in paint. At the crime scene, he remembered, a tube of black poster paint was knocked over. But, just as he was going to announce that Harry-Jens was the culprit Helena asked him “What have you been doing at school today?” He replied “DT. We were using black paint, cardboard and buttons to make a model of a robot. I washed my hands thoroughly but the paint wouldn’t come off.” Harry-Jens was off the list of suspects. Samson made a note in his secret detective notepad.
Then, out of the corner of his eye, the great detective spotted that Tomas’s wristwatch was broken. He asked him “Why was your wristwatch broken?” “I was in your room playing on my Nintendo Switch when I heard a strange noise and I jumped and smashed my wristwatch on the edge of your desk. Then I ran out.” He replied. So Tomas was eliminated from the list. That left only Helena, Jakob and Christof.
Samson adjusted his monocle thoughtfully. He asked Jakob “Have you been playing with Lego recently?” “Yes,” came his reply “I have. I wanted one of my Lego models back that you ‘borrowed’, but a bit broke off it and fell on the floor in the corridor and shattered. I didn’t have time to pick it up because I was busy revising.”
Samson twirled his imaginary moustache as he asked Helena about the pile of washing that hadn’t been put away. Helena showed him her foot which had a large plaster plastered to it “I stood on a piece of Lego in your room before I had time to put your clothes away” she responded “Your room is in such a mess! There was Lego all over the floor! I hope you are going to tidy it up.” Helena got crossed off the list.
Samson polished his magnifying glass as he turned to Christof. “Why were your tools in the corner of my bedroom?” “I was fixing a shelf in your room” Christof replied. “Hmmmm…” thought the legendary detective “it seems that everyone has an alibi.”
Samson was about to give up when he spotted his father’s latest Lego model in the corner of the room. He recognised the unique Lego spires and flagpoles from his model of Egeskov Castle! Now he knew who the culprit was – it was his own father, Christof!
Another case closed by Denmark’s favourite mystery solver, Samson Christofson.
Next week, Samson solves the case of the jelly found in Dad’s shoe.
by Samuel Greeney 🙂 🙂
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I enjoyed reading your detective story. An original idea for a child to cross examine his family. Your writing has several genre features Samuel. I would love to read about another story involving this clever young investigator. Great work. 👏Prize Box
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Who killed Keith lemon ?. . .
One frosty morning in New York City the gang was leisurely lingering around the office waiting for a case. Joe the sports superstar was slumped in the crusty old bean bag. Megan the tangy tastic sweet eating monster was bouncing from wall to wall and Lilly the dull and glum person of the group had just dumped herself on the floor leaning on the grimy stained bug infested wall.
The team may have very little money and are all quite strange characters but they do make a very good team to solve a crime! As they all lay miserable and bored. Suddenly out of the blue, a buzzing sound went off they just presumed it was the extremely large bee but the buzzing just carried on. Once they all managed to use the strength to move their heads from one side to the other they realised it was the phone!
In the blink of an eye Lilly had answered the phone.
“Hello sorry to bother you but is this the office of Lilly, Joe and Megan the detective gang?” asked Lucy from the police force.
“Hiya yes this is Lilly.”
“Oh good we have a job for you and your gang.”
“That will be great what’s the job?”
“Well the TV superstar Keith lemon has been blinded and has died and we want you on the case to find out who’s done this !”
“Ok we will start now. thank you !”
Now the team drew themselves up from their crusty been bags and dirty floor and made their way to the team van. It is a very strange van since this van was the most revolting , rusty, ghastly object you might see on earth but that was only on the outside. On the inside there isn’t a spot of dust. The chairs are heated and they even massage you.
So now they entered the van and drove to Keith lemon’s house were it all took place. It was absolutely enormous. Now all of the gang made their way to the towering doors with their jaws dropped and filled with astonishment! Megan knocked and a rather rude maid came to the door .“What do you want?” asked the maid with a nasty tone.
“We’re here to investigate the death of Keith Lemon.”
“I never liked him…but I would like to know who the killer was so you can come in.” Replied the maid.
“Thank you!” All the gang replied.
It felt strange for the gang since it was clean inside the house and you could see the floors, unlike their office. As they made their way through the dove white halls the first thing they saw was….
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The main room was huge. Lilly plodded to the couch to take a closer look. There were many strands of blonde hair scattered around the grey corner sofa. Joe, Megan and Lilly all took an extra look around but didn’t seem to find anything. As the team was strolling through the corridors Megan was eager to see the kithchen. It was beautiful there was a marble island in the middle circled by cream cupboards. it was a chefs dream. The maid was in there cooking a lemon pie for the funeral but that was no help for the team. Meanwhile Joe and Lilly tried to speak to the maid for clues but she was too busy wipeing her sweat from her forehead and greasy blonde hair. She was a very unpleasant woman. Eventually, Lilly and Joe managed to speak to her but all they got out was her was “all I know is I have to bake this pie for the funeral.” While Megan was stuffing her face they went from room to room and found nothing. so they decided to make their way home.
Once they arrived home they chose to look for his TV show on the telly and search for clues when searching a news report A headline popped up. KEITH LEMON BLINDED TO DEATH BY LEMONS TOXINS!. . .
The team took a second to think. Then Joe suggested that they go to the news company to see the evidence.
Immediately they jumped back into the crazy van. It was a very bumpy ride. They finally made it to the newspaper office un harmed and waited for the reporter.
“Hello I’m John the writer of the news reports at daily news how can I help?”
“Hello we are the gang of detectives who have been searching around New York for clues about the death of Keith Lemon. Have you got any information about his death?”
“Well Keith had just finished his show Through the Key Hole and the contestants were James Cordon, Selena Gomez and Wayne Rooney. It was in the report that he was attacked not long after being home. it just him at home that’s all I know .”
“Thank you very much.”Lilly replied
Next they decided to go to the lemon company to see the latest lemon delivery.
“Hello we are a detective gang for Keith Lemon’s death so please can we see the lemon delivery chart?”
“Hello,yes of course I’ll get it now .”
Lemon delivery chart :
. Jessica smith
. Maddy Clarke
.will gelled
.wayne Rooney
.lucy gardens
.oliver Barker
The gang had two suspects and made their way to both houses. The first stop was Keith lemons to see their first suspect the maid. It was suspicious how she was making a lemon pie.
KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK
“Oh it’s you again what do you want?” asked the maid
“We are here to talk to you about Keith’s death it was funny how you were making a lemon pie and that’s what he was killed with!”
Out of the blue a butler stepped into the room. “actually she was with me at the time of Keith’s death at my brothers birthday party. That gave the maid an alibi. So now it couldn’t have been the maid there was only one person left Wayne Rooney . . .
In a dash the gang set off to his house DING Dong rang the bell.
“Hello why are you here?”asked Rooney.
“We are here to investigate where you where last Friday night After you went on Keith’s tv show.”
Suddenly, he tried to make a run for it. But the gang grabbed him.
“Okay….it was me.” cried Rooney
“But why?”
“He wrecked my house on his show through the key hole I couldn’t help myself!”
Excitedly, the team called the police.
“Thank you !”exclaimed Lucy the police officer .
“It was a pleasure! ” said the gang.
They got into their unusual crazy van and wobbled down the road to their untidy house and would take it easy until the next crime.
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A great development Ava. Edit and Revise for punctuation.
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Until the phone started to ring ,who killed Wayne rooney
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Good start Ava. Correct use of inverted commas. Speech used to convey character. Can you finish please?
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Detective Jojo and his asitant cormac are on a case in The Queen’s place. The case is to find out who stoal the Queen’s crown.
“Okay, tell us what happened from the star” said Detective Jojo. The Queen replied “I was having my tea when suddenly I herd a strange noise in my living room. I looked around the corner and a man was there. He had brown eyes, black hair, with a black jumper and he was holding the crown. l shouted my guards but as soon as I turned back around he vanished like patch of dust in the wind.”
Jojo scratched his head and he thought to himself “this could be a clue” Jojo said to Cormac “around the house for more clues” they both Iooked around.
Then Jojo saw a sneaky tunnel behind a massive tree. He shouted Cormac and they quickly ran over to it “what do we have here?” Cormac said.
They slowlywalked down the tunnel…
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A great start Joe. Good use of adverbs. Correct use of inverted commas. Can you write what happens next? 5DJs
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In the spooky holo tunnel their was a echoing voice we was trying to hear what they were saying but we couldn’t get a word we thought they were talking in a different language but they weren’t until I heard someone saying the “crawn” we walked into the room but we saw no one Cormac shouted echoing through the walls “were trapped!”we are luckily we had a spade in here whilst Cormac started to dig I looked around for more clues suddenly out of the blue I saw a chest with a little red label saying do not open this chest
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Jojo and Cormac tiptoed in the ecoing cave jojo whispered “stop”
Cormac replyed “why” Cormac
“I can hear a voice” Jojo said “some one is already down here”
Try and listen what they’re saying
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